The Challenge:
Write a blog post in 300 words or less ✔, excluding the
title. The post can be in any format, whether flash fiction ✔,
non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should show:
- That it’s morning ✔
- That a man or a woman (or both) is at the beach ✔
- That the MC (main character) is bored ✔
- That something stinks behind where he/she is sitting ✔
- That something surprising happens. ✔
Just for fun, see if you can involve all five senses ✔ AND include
these random words: "synbatec ✔," "wastopaneer ✔," and "tacise ✔." (NB.
these words are completely made up and are not intended to have any
meaning other than the one you give them).
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Image by royal19 |
Sunlight spilled over the waves like liquid gold, glistening
as it reached the shore. My eyes took in
the scene from behind shades that darkened the sky’s rosy hue, filtering it,
dulling its splendor. I’d seen too many sunrises since I’d been there.
I blew out a sigh and trailed a finger through the sand. Just how long does that man intend to keep
me waiting?
The cry of a seagull pulled me from my reverie, as it
swooped down with something in its beak. Ocean water sprinkled my leg, and my
nose crinkled at the fishy scent. Great.
Now the stupid thing was going to feast on God-only-knew-what behind me. So
much for paradise.
I stood to dust the sand from my legs, and a bead of sweat
trickled down, over my collarbone.
“Täcįse.”
I straightened as familiar arms encircled my waist. “Jase,” I
breathed his name on a shuddered exhale, my heart pounding in my chest.
“Šynbätęc, wäśtopanęęr,” he whispered, bending to brush his
lips against my ear.
“Stop.” I squirmed against him. “You know what that island-talk
does to me.”
“I know.” The warmth of his breath danced over my skin. “Is
it working?”
“No,” I managed, barely suppressing a shiver. “Sorry.”
He grinned, tilting my chin back. “Are you sure about that?”
“…No.” Damn it.
His laughter was the best thing I’d heard in days—since we’d
found ourselves stranded on that miserable island.
“Guess what?” he asked, his lips twitching upward.
I turned to him, cautious. “What?”
“We made contact.”
My knees buckled before I could catch myself. “W-We… what?”
“Made contact,” he said, pulling me close. “We’re going
home.”
Tears stung my eyes as he crushed his mouth to mine, still
tasting of tropical rapture. Maybe I was wrong.
It was a beautiful sunrise.
Well, I started the Campaign with my first (ever) flash fiction. Here's to hoping I've improved a little. 300 words exactly. :)
Oh, one more thing. I know this post will bury it, so don't forget to check out my weekly post: Stop Screaming. Have a great week! :)
78 comments:
Ooh I love it!! Great job!! Wonderful imagery, I could really picture everything going on! I'm voting for you :)
(I'm entry #5)
I love how you used those weird words! And I saw that beach so clearly. Great job!
I could feel the MC's relief at the end! Good story!
@Jess - Thank you. I really appreciate that! :)
@Lydia - Thanks! I'm so glad you were able to picture it. :D
@Sonia - Why thank you! :)
Nicely done! Going over to vote! Come visit me at #23!
Very nice story, Carrie.
I love how you got the challenge words in. The imagery is so vivid, great job!
Mind is #25.
I would have to say, that yes, you improved. :)
I love this!! So romantic! I could really feel the emotion :)
As always, you rock my world.
This was great. I loved your usage of the challenge words. Perfect! Really great job.
I could really feel her happiness of going home. Nice romance in there too. Great entry!
Fantastic! There's a real chemistry between these two. If only your last could be just a little bit longer! Nice one! :)
@Sand Castles - Thank you very much! I'll be over soon. :)
@Christy - Thank you! :D
@Jeff - Thanks, Jeff! Did you catch my hockey post yesterday? I thought it might be something you could empathize with. *grins*
@Jen - Why thank you. I appreciate that! :)
@Brooke - Thanks! Having an extra hundred words to play with really helped! :)
@J.A. Bennett - Thank you so much! :D
@Lisa - Why thank you!
P.S. I should have another section for you by this evening. :D
@K.T. Hanna - Thank you very much! :D
@kmckendry- Thank you! I appreciate that! :)
@David - Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D
This piece made me smile :) Beautiful descriptions! Well done.
I love the description! :)
Very romantic, love the interplay of the two! Nice job! ; )
this is a wonderful piece!
Minor detail: Just be careful of some of the tenses you use. Two words: that and there - as you are using I and talking in present tense, they should have been this and here. I always get these wrong too, easily done!
But it is a lovely piece and i really got the feeling or boredom and joy!
Awesome
@Angela - Thank you! :)
@Eagle - Thanks a lot, Eagle! :)
@Sheri - Thank you for the kind words! :D
@Kerrin - Thanks! Hmm, I guess didn't give it much thought last night. (I was concentrating on all of those silly rules!) Duly noted. :)
Oh I loved it! I am really enjoying how everyone incorporated the words, I left them out =(
This was great!
Island talk! What a great idea!
This was adorable! I loved the inventive use of the words 'island-talk' -very clever, now why did I not think of that! lol. Your writing just flows off the page and the chemistry between the two is spot on. A great contender. :)
Your use of “Šynbätęc, wäśtopanęęr,” was great!
I liked the use of island language. Great story!
You've got my vote - I LOVE stranded-on-an-island-with-hunky-guy stories.
I thought it was very clever that you used the random words as a different language! Very good story.
I enjoyed that very much! Well done.
@Bonnie - I don't blame you. Those were some crazy words! Thank you! :)
@Treelight - Why thank you! :)
@Yikici - Thank you so much! I really appreciate the kind words! :D
@J.R. Williams - Thanks! :D
@Mel - Thank you! :)
@Melodie - Thank you very much! (Yeah, to be honest, I didn't feel too bad for the MC... *grins*)
@Tiburon - Thanks! :D
@elizabethanne - Thank you! :)
Great story -- unexpected ending. You have my vote.
There were so many great things about your entry. I love your description of the morning, the clever use of those random words, the chemistry between them, and the ending was refreshingly uplifting. Well done.
Great job! I liked it :)
Thumbs-up to "island-talk" - it definitely increased the chemistry between the two, heated things up a little...
I really liked this! A simple, yet effective piece!
It reminded me of the saying: "Less is more".
(I'm no.#47)
I'm your newest follower, btw.
@Patricia - Thank you! I appreciate that. :)
@AveryMarsh - Oh, thank you so much! That was really nice of you. :D
@Linda - Thanks, Linda! :)
@Mish - Why thank you! I'll be right over to check out yours. :)
That was fantastic. And I loved the island-talk. LOL. Those two don't realize what they have. They should stay on the island. Not only are they assured of exclusive love, they don't have to pay taxes or answer to anybody. You write a hot romance, Carrie. :)
That was a sweet ending. I enjoyed it. Mine is #56
That was beautiful. Happy ending to boot! :D
Lol, you could see these two at each other's throats if they hadn't made contact. As did everyone, I enjoyed your inventive use of the nonsensical words and I think you had an effective use of exposition and technique in relaying this love/hate story. My only constructive comment would be the positioning of a couple of commas, but I find this a very common bone of contention among many writers, so maybe its just me. Very well done and thank you for finding mine.
I LOVED that first sentence...beautiful. Plus you rocked the crazy words. High five.
loved jase and the island talk!
Ooo! I loved it! Way to make the special words all steamy!
This is your first flash fiction??? Loved it! Nice job!
This was really good! Great imagery :) I'm #69
Absolutely excellent. I'm trying to be original. LOL. This was great. Thanks, Carrie.
The "talk dirty to me" part was hilarious with those words! Really great range of emotions in a short piece! Very nice job.
Mine is #7.
I agree! I love the use of the challenge words. Too funny!
You did a really good job on this. I liked how you used the made-up words!
Great job using the made up words - nice job on the challenge! I'm #65.
Loved the "island talk." Great way to fit those words into your entry. Congratulations on a great job.
@Laila - Hah! I never thought of it that way. Only you, only you... *grins* Thank you!
@Bridget - Thank you! I'll be along to check it out soon!
@LadyJai - Thank you very much!
@S P Mount - Oh, you know it. ;) Thank you very much!
@Jessica - Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it!
@Fairview - Thank you!
@Pegasus - Why thank you!
@Maeve - The first Campaign Challenge was my first flash fiction, but I'm still trying to get the hang of it. Thank you!
@Alyssa - Thank you!
@Joylene - *grins* Thank you so much! :D
@Dawn - I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks!
@Candy - Thank you! :)
@Brinda - Thank you so much!
@Lady Gwen - Thank you! I'm hoping to make rounds this weekend. I can't wait to read it!
@cleemckenzie - Thank you very much!
Beautiful description and strong voice. Lovely ending. Great work!
Loved your story. I'm helping judge this round and advanced your story onto the next round of judging. Good luck.
Awesome. Those words! Really. You did great.
Good job, nicely done.
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@Joanna - Thank you! :)
@Stacy - Thank you so much! I really appreciate that! :D
@Donna - Thanks! I hope all is well!
@Mooderino - Thank you! I'll be sure to follow you back.
Good job! I like your descriptions. New follower here :) Nice to meet you.
@Michelle - Thank you! I'll be over to visit your blog soon. It's nice to meet you, too! :)
Great predicament. Really enjoyed the imagery. You definitely pulled me into the MC's head.
@Isis - Thank you! I'm so glad to hear that. :)
Good job!! And your first flash fiction even! Impressive.
@L.A. Speedwing - The first Campaign Challenge was my first flash fiction, but I'm still trying to get the hang of it. Thank you!
Hey still, that still counts! ;-) And by the way, thanks for visiting me.
@L.A. Speedwing - Thanks! Oh, you're welcome. I'm following now. :D
cool imagery, and the ending has impact.
@Damyanti - Thank you! :)
Hmm-hmm, those darn island-talking men will get you every time. lol. This peice was a lot of fun, nicely done!
I love what you did with the challenge words.
@Jes - *grins* You know it! Thank you! :)
@Holly - Thank you! :D
Catching up to your blog now :S
Your writing is as good as ever! I love your descriptions so very much- that first paragraph especially was so perfect :D
@Sally - Aww, thank you! That made my day, Sally. :)
Great job!! I get the pleasure of judging this round, and you're moving onto Round 2!
@Jen - Oh, thank you so much! :) I really appreciate that. *hugs*
Carrie, nice work here! I definitely want to know more! Great imagery, nice writing and showing, and good use of the made-up words!! I'm also excited to let you know I'm one of the judges for this round, and I've selected you to move on to the finals! You'll be winning a prize (though I'm not sure what *wink wink*). Congrats!
@Cortney - Thank you! :) Seriously? Wow! Thank you so much! I really, really appreciate it! *hugs*
Hi Carrie, congratulations on making it to the final 12! I've now judged the entries, and you've come Sixth! I loved your imagery, and the way you conveyed the emotions of your MC! Well done you!!!
Don't forget to pop by Rach Writes... to see what you've won!
Hugs,
Rach
@Rachael Harrie - Oh, Rach! That's so exciting. :) Thank you so much! I really, really appreciate it. I'll be right over! *hugs*
YOU WON! That's super. Loved your story, so I'm really happy for you.
@cleemckenzie - Thank you so much! I had never entered a writing "contest" before this Campaign, so I was really excited! :)
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