Today, I have a special treat for you guys! The lovely Becca Puglisi, one half of The Bookshelf Muse blogging duo, is here to talk about creating strong scenes. She recently co-authored The Emotion Thesaurus: A Writer's Guide to Character Expression and let me tell you, this woman really knows her stuff!
"Through an easy-to-use list format, this
brainstorming tool explores seventy-five emotions and provides a large
selection of body language, internal sensations, actions and thoughts
associated with each."
Sounds fantastic, doesn't it? Well, you're in luck! Becca & Angela have graciously agreed to give a PDF copy of The Emotion Thesaurus to one of my lucky readers. All you have to do is use the widget at the end of this post. I added a ton of options, so enter however you like. :) This giveaway ends June 09, 2012 at 12:01 a.m. (EST).
Take it away, Becca!
Sounds fantastic, doesn't it? Well, you're in luck! Becca & Angela have graciously agreed to give a PDF copy of The Emotion Thesaurus to one of my lucky readers. All you have to do is use the widget at the end of this post. I added a ton of options, so enter however you like. :) This giveaway ends June 09, 2012 at 12:01 a.m. (EST).
Take it away, Becca!
Three Ingredients of a Good Scene
Ingredient #1: A GOAL. Every scene contains a main character, and in every scene, the main character wants something. Maybe he wants to open an enchanted door (The Hobbit, chapter 11). Or possibly, he’d just like to get away from his horrific guardians (Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone, chapter 3). Regardless, if there is no goal, the reader doesn’t have anything to root for. There’s no momentum, no movement. For every scene in your manuscript, ask yourself, What does my main character want? If you can’t find an answer, create one. There must be a goal in every single scene to maintain reader interest and keep the pace moving forward.
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Ingredient #3: EMOTIONAL CHANGE. Character emotion drives reader emotion. If your character’s emotion doesn’t go anywhere, your readers won’t connect with him and they lose interest. (I’m seeing a pattern here). So the third question to ask about any particular scene is: What emotion is my character feeling at the start of the scene, and what does he feel at the end of the scene? For the reader to be emotionally involved, the character must experience an up or down change in emotion. Bilbo starts the scene excited (when the path to the hidden entrance is discovered), then moves to despair (when the weeks pass and they can’t open the door) and finishes the scene elated (when the door finally opens). Poor Harry starts out resigned to his miserable summer but quickly becomes hopeful when the mysterious letters start arriving. If your character’s emotions aren’t changing, then nothing must be happening, and if nothing is happening, the reader will lose interest. Make sure that in each scene, your character experiences a change of emotion.
If, when looking at a scene, you find that you don’t have an answer to any of the above questions, either create one or examine the scene’s necessity to the story. It could be that the scene has no true purpose and should be cut to make your story stronger.
And now that I’ve disclosed my three favorite ingredients of a good scene, I’ll ask you to complete the recipe. What else, besides a goal, conflict, and emotional change, should every scene contain?
Becca Puglisi is one half of The Bookshelf Muse blogging duo, and co-author of The Emotion Thesaurus: A Writer's Guide to Character Expression. Listing the body language, visceral reactions and thoughts associated with 75 different emotions, this brainstorming guide is a valuable tool for showing, not telling, emotion. The Emotion Thesaurus is available for purchase through Amazon, Barnes & Noble, iTunes, and Smashwords, and the PDF can be purchased directly from her blog.
Have a great week, guys! ♥
P.S. Don't be silly, Becca. You two are always welcome here! :)
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Carrie asked me to let you all know that some bad storms have blown through her part of the country and she has been without power since Friday. She's okay, just unable to comment right now. Please party without her and she'll respond when she's back among the cyber-living. ;)
I'm a fan of Becca (Angela, too), The Bookshelf Muse, and The Emotion Thesaurus. You should check them all out--so worth your time. Great post!!! :)
Well, I hope Carrie and all her neighbours are all right. I love the Emotion Thesaurus and will be using it extensively in my next edit.
i love this advice & it made me think! the other thing a good scene needs is a cliff hanger to make the reader want to know what happens next!
I was hoping your power was back up, but I know that's a stretch after the horrendous storms of last week.
I LOVE the Emotion Thesaurus & bought my copy as soon as it came out. Can't wait to use it on my next book!
Thinking of you, Carrie!
It's like each scene is a mini-journey! Great breakdown, Becca. And thanks for having her on, Carrie. I hope you get your power back soon.
This is to concise and powerful I immediately added the list "goal, conflict, emotional change" to my edit notes for the next sweep through my MS.
Hope you get your power back soon, Carrie.
Excellent insights and advice. I'll have to check out your book, Becca. Thanks for sharing. Keeping to your advice will help rid filler scenes, or at least make sure they have something more to them. Thanks
Great advice and so well and clearly written. Greatly appreciated.
Very nice advice, thanks!!
Love their website! Great advice . . . I use a plot analysis chart when I write with 3 rows to fill in for purpose/goal, setting, and event . . . and I strive for 30 distinct scenes. The first scene is the hook, of course. Scenes 10 & 20 (or there about) mark major plot twists. Scene 15 & 25 mark minor plot points.
I have a copy of the Emotional Thesaurus and I love it. Thanks for these great points, Becca. Hi, Carrie! Happy 4th of July.
I have no idea if I entered that right but that book sounds fabulous. What a great post. This just cements my recent quandary over whether to include a scene I really love in my WIP. It has no purpose. I'll cut it. Thanks!
I guess hook and ending that either moves the story forward or leaves us on a cliffhanger or ties something up etc.
These are definitely excellent ingredients to create tension on every page. Thank you for sharing!
Thanks for the big three, Becca. I'm off to use your advice.
A perfect breakdown of the three key ingredients Becca! And Carrie, you are awesome for hosting us today! :) I hope you have a great Fourth tomorrow!
Angela
And yikes--I just read the first comment--Carrie, I'm glad you are okay! Stay inside & stay dry, and catch up on your reading! :)
I love The Bookshelf Muse and the book. When I got my copy in the mail.
Great post, Carrie. Sorry about all the freaky weather but glad you're safe.
Take Care!
Carrie, I hope you are okay. I can't wait to keep a copy of the emotion thesaurus.
Ooh, a strong ending is definitely a necessary ingredient for strong scenes!
You know, I've heard people talk about each scene being it's own complete arc, and I think each scenes probably should be its own mini-journey. But to be completely honest, I'm just not that good, lol. Some day...
Jameson, I agree--this checklist had been great in helping me determine whether a scene should be fleshed out or flushed :).
Ooooooh. I do like a good plotting system, though I prefer post-its, myself.
Lisa, I've found that the scenes we love are the hardest to examine objectively. I usually try to pinch them and poke them and prod them to get them to "necessary" status, but before long, it becomes obvious which ones can be saved and which ones need to go.
*sniff sniff*
Thanks for reading, everyone, and for all the encouraging comments. Carrie, I hope you're doing okay and you get power back soon!
your book sounds wonderful. I am particularly drawn to the strong, silent type of hero...so there aren't a lot of external cues to work with. Which only makes it more fun, in my opinion, to decipher.
As for scenes, these are great reminders. I would also agree that a strong ending to carry into the next scene is vital. And pacing! A story needs to flow from one scene to the next. Finding the right pacing is vital to maintaining a flow that propels the reader through scene, chapter, and book.
I think these are great! I've bookmarked the page for the next time I have a problem scene.
Thanks for the writing advice! I tend to have trouble with defining a specific, concrete goal in scenes; this post will definitely come in handy.
Ah, pacing. My nemesis. Like Matthew said, each scene really is like a mini-story, and as such, it needs the right pacing, too.
Brilliant, simple and true.
I getting ready to dive into edits and I'm going to make sure I keep these tips in mind as I go through the chapters! I hope you get your electricity back soon, Carrie!
Thank you for holding down the fort, Melissa! I really appreciate it. :)
...Almost as much as I appreciate this wonderful electricity! ♥
Thank you, Clarissa! We finally regained power tonight, after four long days. :)
Me too!
Absolutely! :)
Unfortunately, I had this one pre-scheduled. I was in the dark for over four days.
...But it's back now! *Happy dance*
Thank you, Nancy! :)
Mini-journey is an excellent way to put it, Matt! :) Thank you!
Isn't she great? :) Thank you, Botanist!
Fleshed out or flushed... I love it! :)
I hope you're having a great 4th, Lee! :)
Thanks for stopping by, Chris! :)
I must create one of these charts. Sounds great!
Thank you, Joylene! :) Happy belated Canada Day! :)
Looks like your entries went through, Lisa! :) Good luck on the WIP-that-I-better-see-someday!
Thanks for stopping by, Sophia! :)
Gotta love it! :) Thanks for stopping by, Alleged!
Good luck, Leslie! :)
My power came on last night. (Thank God!) I can't tell you how happy I am to be back! :) Thank you, Angela. Happy 4th of July!
Thanks, Dana! :D Happy 4th!
Thank you, Rena!
P.S. Did you know Rena is the name of my MC? :)
I'm back! You should have seen me doing the happy dance outside last night. :D Thank you for everything, Becca. You've been wonderful!
I'm with you, Pamela! It's fun to decipher the strong, silent types. ;) Thanks for stopping by!
Awesome! :) Thanks for stopping by, Angel!
Handy, indeed! I'm bookmarking it, and it's on my own site. LOL
Isn't Becca fantastic? :) Thanks for stopping by, Rafael!
Thank you, Janel! The electricity came back on last night. I can't even begin to tell you how grateful I am! :)
Hope all is well in the aftermath of the storm. This is a wonderful post-- great advice, stated simply. I will share it with my critique group.
Great post! well said and clear for anyone to follow! Thanks for sharing it :)
I struggle with that, too. But I've found that just asking that question (What does my main character want in this scene?) helps to clarify that. Good luck!
Welcome home, Carrie! I live in south Florida, and with the heat, I've been thinking of you. So glad your power's back on!
I've entered! This book sounds SO GOOD! I've been going back and forth between buying/not buying, so maybe I'll win and solve that conflict. LOL
Thanks for hosting this!
Just what I was going to say. No point in writing a scene if everything is wrapped up so tidily that no one is interested in reading further. Keep them turning the pages.
Thank you, Ruth! We're slowly getting back on track. :)
Thanks for stopping by, Jamie! :)
Thank you, Becca! :)
Oh my goodness. The heat and humidity have been horrible. I'm praying for everyone still without power. I feel blessed to have gotten mine back after the fourth day!
I wish you the very best of luck, Katrina! It really is a great book. :D
First, my bit on the post. I've heard this advice enough to know I should do it. And by "it" I mean asking myself what my character wants during each scene. But alas, I still always forget. Maybe this will be the time it finally sinks in.
Now, for my bit on "Carrie with no power." I know exactly how that feels, Carrie, and I'm so glad your electricity is back on. I've experienced the same thing a couple of times in the past few years (though thankfully not this one) due to ice/snow storms. Last year it was at least five days before they got our power back on. And that's not the most frustrating part. On the fourth day or so, they turned our neighborhood back on. Our whole neighborhood but my house and the two on either side. -.- Because someone forgot to flip a switch. -.-x2
Great advice. I am a huge fan of both Becca and Angela nd of course The Bookshelf muse. I have turned to their blog often for help with describing and portraying emotions. I am so glad they made a book with all of their tips and useful descriptions.
Great tips here. It almost seems like each scene should be treated as a mini story. Thanks for the giveaway!
That's understandable, Brooke! I usually plow through scenes, and then go back to ask questions. It takes a while to sink in. :)
Thank you! Oh, man. Winter power outages are downright miserable! And yours was prolonged because someone forgot to flip a switch? Geesh. I feel for ya!
Me too, Melissa! :) Thanks for stopping by!
It does, doesn't it? I'm going to try thinking of it that way. :) Thanks for stopping by, Nick!
If you get a chance to watch the body language experts on the news shows, they're fascinating. Everything from someone briefly parting his lips with his tongue when he finds the other person in the conversation to be repulsive, to someone touching his wedding ring to feel secure.
I love body language segments! You're right, Mark. It's all very fascinating. :)
I'm late reading this, but seriously love this! The tips are basic and simple, yet so easily forgotten sometimes. I've actually saved this post up in my little writing notes X'D
Thank you, Ruth. I hope it comes in handy!
Good luck, Katrina!
Hi, Melissa! Thanks for stopping by!
Nick, I've heard this a number of times. I'm lacking the self-discipline to go through the whole story-writing process for each scene, but including these 3 elements is a good start.
One of the books we read when researching The Emotion Thesaurus was Paul Ekman's Telling Lies. He's the guy that the show Lie to Me is based on. Very interesting stuff.
Hope it helps, Sally!
Doesn't Becca rock? I saved it, too. :) Thanks for stopping by, Sally!
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