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"What If?" The Fairy Tale Madness Blogfest
Rules:
- Think of your favorite "well known" fairytale and ask "What If…!"
- Pick one of these four categories:
Best Plot Twist, Best Love Story, Best Tragedy , Best Comic Relief - Write a scene/flash fiction illustrating a new detail of the fabled fairy tale that changes our perspective.
- Keep it PG-13
- Post your story between August 13th and 17th.
- 300 word maximum.
- Fairy tale: Little Red Riding Hood
- Setting: Modern/urban
- Team: Tragedy
- Twist: Ending
- Word count: 300 exactly
“You be careful, Red,” my dad warned from the doorway, smoke edging out around his words. “Did you take that pepper spray with ya?”
I jogged down the steps to the sidewalk. “Yes, Dad.”
“And you got them cookies for Nana?”
My boots splashed an inky puddle, scattering the streetlights. “Right here.” I held up the wicker basket as proof. Honestly, did he not get that I turned eighteen last week? I could handle a freakin’ errand down the street.
He grunted. “Just straight there and back, okay? None of your shortcuts.”
“Got it,” I said, tossing a wave over my shoulder. “I’ll be right back. I promise.”
“And don’t talk to nobody,” he yelled at my back.
“And don’t talk to nobody,” he yelled at my back.
“Yeah, yeah.” Geez. Watching the news made him paranoid. So there’d been a few abductions last month. It wasn’t like they were close.
I pulled up my hood against the wind and ducked around the corner. Nana lived a few blocks away and unless I wanted to freeze my ass off, I’d have to take an unapproved detour.
“Excuse me,” a man called from a few feet back. “Miss?”
Shit. Was he talking to me? I took a few steps, and then burst into a jog when I heard his footsteps quicken behind me.
“Wait!”
My heart hammered in my chest as we plunged into the alley’s darkness, and I patted my jacket for the pepper spray. Was this seriously happening? Now?
“—dropped this,” he yelled.
Right.
Right.
When we reached the end, I bolted past two parked cars and into the street. If I could just make if to the other side...
I threw a glance back and froze. The man was bent over, gasping for breath and clutching the bow from Nana’s basket. Oh.
Too bad I missed the headlights.
Have a great week, guys! ♥
Great story! But poor little Red :(
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kyra! :)
DeleteOh, I know! What's with me and flash fiction? It always ends up so much darker than my normal writing...
Splat! Great twist.
ReplyDeleteHah! I almost spit out my water. ;) Thanks, Alex!
DeleteTypical teenage. A few abductions last month--no big deal. They think they'll live forever. Maybe not!
ReplyDeleteAh, to be young and invincible… ;) Thanks for stopping by, Suzi!
DeleteBwhahaha! I love it! Great twist at the end there, and seriously, that would so be me. I'd bolt if a guy started running up behind me. Yikes! Lol.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Cassiopeia! :) Oh, me too. I'd be all, "STRANGER DANGER! AHH!"
DeleteHow sad! You always trust the handsome stranger, poor girl ;)
ReplyDeleteI felt like I was betraying my romantic roots with this one. They should've had a HEA! ;)
DeleteLOL! Carrie, I could read your writing any time... I love it. It's so smooth and creates the right images. AWESOME... ;D
ReplyDeleteAww, Morgan. You always make my day. <3 Thank you!
Deletehaha, this was fun. I like it! What if Cinderella got changed back into a donkey and when the Prince found her, the shoe actually fit her hoof??? I know, I'm just so creatively adaptable!
ReplyDeleteHah! I love it. You would've dominated this blogfest, Joylene. ;)
DeleteROFL - I love Alex's 'splat.' xD
ReplyDeleteGreat flash fiction, Carrie. Loved it! :D
I did, too! You should've seen me cracking up about it, and then feeling bad... *grins* Thank you!
DeleteSnap! Deliciously wicked end, and the video was a nice touch (listening as I write.) Thanks for the shudder. :P
ReplyDeleteThanks, D.D.! I love that song, and it felt creepy enough to fit the scene. :D
DeleteYou would make little read NEW ADULT! I am seriously laughing my butt off right now. She's so snarky I loves ;)
ReplyDeleteYou know I'm all about NA right now! ;) Thanks, Victoria!
DeleteHow much fun was that? I loved it, Carrie.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Lee! :D
DeleteShe should've listened to her daddy. Teenagers! Very cute, Carrie. Wish I had the brail for this one.
ReplyDeleteBrain! Ugh!
DeleteIndeed. I guess hindsight really is 20/20. *Sigh* Poor Red...
DeleteThank you, Nancy! :)
Very cool idea! That was so fun. :D
ReplyDeleteThank you, Bethany! :D
DeleteLove your tragic take on this! "Pepper spray" HA!
ReplyDeleteWhy thank you, Empress King! :)
DeleteWell done! Tragic too. Thanks for the clever twist.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Stephen! :)
DeleteExcellent! That is tragic!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Lara! :D
DeleteYay for Team Tragedy!
ReplyDeleteThis is brilliant writing Carrie! Love this story. Poor Red. I think I would have ran too though. :(
Go Team Tragedy! :)
DeleteThank you, Leigh! I appreciate that. Unfortunately, I probably would've, too... :(
Oh, ouch! Poor Red!
ReplyDeleteOuch, indeed! I felt kind of sick ending it that way. :/
DeleteOopsie! Nice 300.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Natasha! :)
DeleteI love the twist of the ending. I was all worried for her and the man who followed her but then bam! the ending.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Clarissa! That makes my day. :)
Deletewhat a fun meme! and i guess strangers in cars as as dangerous as those on foot ;)
ReplyDeleteHeck yeah! Gotta watch out for everyone. ;) Thanks for stopping by, Gina!
DeleteHah hah . .. that was AWESOME!!!!
ReplyDeleteWhy thank you, Lisa! :D
DeleteYay!! So fun!
ReplyDeleteGotta love blogfests! :)
DeleteGreat modern retelling of a classic! Hopefully, she awakes in a hospital bed some time later. Tragedy strikes again! Beautifully written. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Michael! I appreciate the kind words.
DeleteOo, yes. I'll probably sleep better if we assume she wakes up in a hospital. ;)
Oooh. Now she's sleeping beauty, right?
ReplyDelete;)
Oo, nice one! Very clever. :D
DeleteLove it, Carrie! I always enjoy retelling of classics.
ReplyDeleteHappy blogiversary to everyone!
Thank you, Talli! It was an interesting prompt to play around with. :)
DeleteAwesome!
ReplyDeleteGreat twist :)
Thanks, Carol! :D
Delete:( Sad. Awesome twist, though. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Ilima! :)
DeleteBlogger doesn't like me today...comment, take two. :)
ReplyDeleteHeh heh, nice one. I don't even want to know what gave you the idea for this, but now I must check out the others.
Thanks for taking the time to comment again, Dana! :) Oo, you should. It was a fun prompt!
DeleteOuch! Didn't see that one coming!
ReplyDeleteIt gives a new meaning to "red" in Red Riding Hood...
Oo, that's true (in a sick, twisted kind of way)! ;)
DeleteNICE!!!
ReplyDeleteLittle Squished Riding Hood... great job in updating such a classic story and what a tragic end... I blame the dad for being all paronoid :)
Thanks for participating :)
The compassion of writers knows no bounds... *grins*
DeleteThank you, Mark!! :D
So are we assuming she's dead because it's a tragedy...?
ReplyDeleteI left it open for interpretation. Getting hit by a car is pretty disastrous, either way. Eek!
DeleteLOL, I laughed so hard when I saw that last line. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI think you're of the Alex mindset, Jaycee. "Splat!" ;) Thank you!
DeleteUh oh, I guess cars can be trickier than wolves sometimes. :)
ReplyDeleteIndeed! The moral of this fairy tale is: Don't run out in traffic. ;)
Deletehahahaa when I was younger my dad always presented me with pepper spray when I moved to a new city/went to college
ReplyDeleteI had pepper spray for going off to college/moving to a new city, too! I was always afraid of spraying myself in the face, though... LOL
DeleteNice voice! Love it and the spin :) I picked Red Riding Hood as well :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Hope! :) I'm off to read yours now.
DeleteI love that tragic ending!
ReplyDeleteA2Z Mommy and What’s In Between
Thank you, Tracy! :D
DeleteAll these fairytale mix ups are making me wonder when Once Upon a Time is going to come back on TV.
ReplyDeleteYes! I love that show. :D
DeleteHi, Carrie,
ReplyDeleteWhat an interesting turn of events. My heart was pounding right along with Red's.
I chose RRH also. But, alas, my is VERY different.Talk about a twist. LOL. Hope you'll drop by to read it. You'll have a good laugh.
Mark and Morgan dropped their jaws unexpectedly. Lol.
Thank you, Michael! I'm happy to hear that.
DeleteI'm hurrying over to your blog now. I want to read this jaw-dropping twist! ;)
Oh wow! That was really intense!!
ReplyDeleteMy dad gave me pepper spray when I went off to school. Such a dad thing to do :P
Samantha
Writing Through College
Thank you, Samantha!
DeleteHeck yeah. Gotta look out for their girls! :)
LOL! Oh no she'll definitely be red now and squished. Great twist on the tale.
ReplyDeleteI love how delightfully twisted you guys are. Everyone is commenting on the red thing! LOL Thanks, Madeleine!
DeleteSuch a thing as being too paranoid, maybe? I felt the tension in this. I like how you leave it up to the reader as to whether this is her demise...
ReplyDeletePerhaps! Thank you, Nick. :)
Deleteshoulda listened to her preachin papa...
ReplyDeletegreat tragic twist for so few words!
Thanks, Tara! :)
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